Writing教学设计(第一课时)

月考作文讲评

Teaching content :written expression in this monthly exam.

Teaching aims :Gradually develop students to write compositions in a correct way.

Teaching important /difficult points :

1.Presenting the problems that appeared in their compostions .

2.Leading them to correct the mistakes in each sentence.

3.Asking them to correct their own mistakes in their compositions.

Teaching methods: explaining and practising.

Teaching procedures:

Step 1. Briefly introduce the basic results of the written expressions.

average score:13. Those who have bad handwritting include:吴景涛，章鹏，周鹏，吴涛，沈福霞，周晨婷，任慧

Step 2.Presenting the typical problems appearing in students' analysing the writing task. 写作任务，书面表达。

假定你是李华，你的朋友David 上周与他的父母发生了争吵,十分苦恼。请你以自己的经历，根据以下要点，写一篇120个词左右的英语短文，劝说David。

1.你的父母规矩太多，过于强调学习成绩，不理解自己等问题，

2，你对这些问题的看法。

3，你与父母保持良好关系的做法。

审题存在的问题:

1.请以自己的经历，根据以下要点，劝说David .应该用一人称。

表达为：My parents make a lot of rules for me .但是很多同学写成了：Your parents make a lot of rules for you.

2.时态混乱。

本文是书信，但是内容应该是说明性的，该用一般现在时。但是很多同学写成了一般过去时,或混用。如，My parents thought study is the most important thing 。

3.要点归纳不齐。

第一段：安慰对方;再用一个承接上文，启动下文的句子。如，

It's normal for teenagers to have a quarrel with parents,so don't worry .I will share my experience that is similar to yours with you . 第二段：列举父母的行为；你对这些问题的看法（实际是分析他们为什么这么做)；你的做法：至少2点措施。

这里很多同学表达不完整。

第三段：提出希望。

Step 3. Presenting the typical mistakes showing up in students' compostions and leading them to correct them . 谓语动词的错误

1.You must let them that you are grow up.（李佳）（be 动词与实意动词混用）

2.I was fight with my parents too.（胡兰蕊）

3.My mum and Dad made a long list which

is listed

many rules that they wanted me to do

（胡兰蕊）（主动与被动的区别，用词不当）

4.They wanted me to get first prize and never ask me ''How are you?''（胡兰蕊）（并列谓语时态不一致）

5.My parents is opening now（.胡兰蕊）（谓语动词的单复数）

6.You just need to tell them what are you really want .（胡兰蕊）（宾语从句的语序问题，be 与do 的区别）

7.Maybe your behaviours can't made them satisfied ,or they happened a littles of bad things that caused them looked unhappy .（杨佳丽）（情态动词的用法，特殊句型，非谓语动词）

8.My parents have so many rules that I think it's not reasonable and I often against with it.（高浩钞）（定语从句，缺be）

9.We can talking about some happily things with they.（高浩钞）

10.We don't a quarrel with our parents because they give life to we.

My parents understanding they have many rules and important my

score.（赖玉莲）（缺动词，谓语与非谓语）

总结：常见的谓语动词中出现的错误有：时态问题；语态问题；

主动和被动混淆；单复数问题；be 动词与行为动词混用；情态动词+do;系表结构缺be ;宾语从句的语序问题。

乱用词性

1.I think the rules limit my free.（周晨婷）（形容词与名词）

2.THey don't know and understand your truth

questions.（胡壬）

3.I think they are righting （任慧）

I'll hoping you are happily.（任慧）

非谓语动词的错误

1.I was regretted after argue with them.（黄小敏）

2.There are some advice about get along with your parents （罗嘉欣）

Step 4. Practising

Asking students to correct the mistakes that I have underlined them . If they have some problems,they can turn to their partners or me for help. Step 5. Appreciating and learning the model.

Dear David,

I'm sorry to learn that you had a quarrel with your parents last week. And you are in the bad mood now. What a pity!Don't worry. I'll share with you how I get along with my parents.

There are too many rules in my home. My parents never allow me to go out with my friends at night, and they pay too much attention to my grades. Sometimes I feel my parents don't quite understand me.

However I understand them because they really love me and expect me to have a bright future. So i'll try my best to study hard, treating them as friends and communicating with them about my

troubles.When I have spare time, I often help them do more housework. So we keep a good relationship.

If you can

follow my examples,

I can guarantee that you can be

on good terms with your parents.

yours