Using LanguageⅡ第二课时 公开课

A teaching plan of writing

Teaching aims:

1. Knowledge aim Students can learn what makes a good essay. 2. Ability aim Students can master the skills of writing a good essay. 3. Emotional aim Students can learn to work cooperatively with others. Teaching important and difficult points:

Teaching important points: 1.Students can learn what makes a good essay. 2.Students can learn the skills of writing a good essay. Teaching difficult point: Students can learn how to write a good essay. Teaching methods:

Discussion, Presentation Teaching tools:

1.The multimedia 2.The board Teaching procedures：

Step 1 Warming-up:

Ask and answer

Talk about the importance of writing in English tests. Then ask: What makes a good essay? And how many necessary parts does a good essay have? Step 2 Presentation:

1. What makes a good essay? A good essay is usually made up of a topic paragraph, some supporting paragraphs and a concluding paragraph.

1).Topic paragraph (Introduction paragraph) ⑴ General statement ⑵ Topic statement To many students, school life is boring and tiring. However, I find my school life meaningful and colourful.

2). Supporting Paragraphs (Body Paragraphs) TS(Topic sentence) SS(Supporting sentences) Firstly, ... Secondly, ... Moreover, ... Finally, . . . 3). Conclusion paragraph Personally,…

In conclusion, In brief, From what has been discussed above, we may draw the conclusion that ... In summary, it is wiser ... 2. What makes a good paragraph? 1). A good paragraph is one that consists of a topic sentence and supporting sentences. There are different kinds of bee. Some live in large groups like the honey bee, and make their nests in trees or holes in the rocks. Other species make their nests in holes in the ground. There are also varieties that do not live in groups at all… Wherever you go in our school, you see green lawns and trees and beautiful flowers. Dotted among these trees and flowers are many buildings of different styles. A stream runs through our school and you always see everything reflected in the water. Our school is just like a garden. 2). A good paragraph is one that contains proper linking words. I believe English is more important than other foreign languages for many reasons. First of all, English is spoken by a large number of people, and these people are the most widely spread across the world in a great many countries. Secondly, English is the most widely used language on the Internet. It has become an on-line

language. Thirdly, the 2008 Olympic Games will be held in our country and English will be very useful. Lastly, … 正确使用有关连接词 时间先后：first, then, later, in the end, eventually, since then, after that 转折关系：but, however, on the contrary, nevertheless 因果关系：because, since, as, thanks to, owing to, as a result of, for the reason that 让步关系：though, although, even if, even though, in spite of the fact that 递进关系：what’s more, in addition, furthermore

on the one hand …

on the other hand, 条件关系：if, unless, as long as, on condition that …

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举：for example / instance, take…for example, that’s to say

in other words, as follows 表

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结：in short, in brief, in conclusion, in a word, on the whole, as has been stated 3). A good paragraph is one with different sentence patterns. e.g. What a kind boy he is! How disappointed he was ! e.g. It was this young boy that helped the old granny. I do hope you can come if possible. e.g. Only in this way can you solve this problem. There

comes the police car. Hardly had they got to the station when

they met the young man. e.g. They read while walking or riding on a bus. 4). A good paragraph is one that contains some advanced words and phrases. (1). I can’t find any way to solve the problem.

(换作高级词汇：

I can’t find any solution to the problem .)

(2). The question is really difficult to understand (换作高级词汇: The question is really confusing .) (3). He had to face all the possible difficulties. (换作高级词汇：He had to cope with all the possible difficulties ) (4). It will be very interesting. (换作同义词：It will be a lot of fun.) (5). He was so clever that he could count all the way up to 100 at one year old. (换作同义词：He was so smart that he could count all the way up to 100 at one year old.) (6). Last summer I visited New Jersey with my parents. (换作同义词：Last summer I toured New Jersey with my parents.) (7). Suddenly I had a good idea. (换作短语：Suddenly I came up with a good idea.) (8). Take a moment to see what is happening around you. (换作短语：Take a moment to see what is going on around you.) (9). Everyone should do his or her best. (换作短语：Everyone is supposed to do his or her best.)

Come to me if necessary. e.g. I saw a young lady walking slowly in the street with a

handbag in her hand. e.g. In my opinion, cyber cafes should be a place where we can find much useful information. Let’s come to the main teaching building, at the back of which stands the school library. e.g. That’s what I should do.

We should do a favour to whoever needs help at present. e.g. Time passed quickly before we knew it. The moment we reached the farm, we got down to harvesting. So long as we work harder at our lessons, we’ll catch up

sooner or later. Step 3 Practice:

How to use different patterns and advanced words 1. To his surprise, the little girl knows so many things.（使用名词性从句）

2. Though I’m weak, I’ll make the effort. (使用倒装句) 3. He did not know what had happened until he had read the news in the newspaper.(使用强调句型) 4. I passed the physics exam because of your help.(用虚拟语气）

5. She walked out of the lab and many students followed her. (使用过去分词) 6. They sang and laughed as they went back to school.( 使用V-ing形式) 7.I won’t believe what he says. （no matter what状语从句）

8. If you study hard, you will make rapid progress.

（祈使句+and…）

9．He had no sooner come back from Beijing than he was sent abroad. (使用倒装句) 10.We all think he is a great man. (think highly of) 11.As a result the plan was a failure. (turn out) 12. When he spoke, he felt more and more excited. (the more…the more)

Step 4 Summary: A good essay is usually made up of a topic paragraph, some supporting paragraphs and a concluding paragraph.

A good paragraph is one that consists of a topic sentence and supporting sentences. A good paragraph is one that contains proper linking words. A good paragraph is one with advanced vocabulary and varied sentence patterns. Step 5 Improvement: ASSESSMENT structure Is the essay divided into parts? Does each part have a topic sentence? Are all the details stated? content Language Is everything to the point(切题)? Are any linking words used? Are there any mistakes? Is there any advanced vocabulary（高级词汇）? Are there any good sentence patterns（句式）? Exercise: Good afternoon, everyone! The topic of my speech today is “My Attitude to Pursuit

of Fashion in School”.

Now in our school there is a hot pursuit of fashion. Some students live a very expensive life …

_______. _______, they hope to look smart and special. _______, they want to win others’ admiration and respect.

In addition, it makes them feel cool . _______, we students should hold the right sense of

values. We should practice thrift in our daily life . _____ , it is advisable for us to donate some pocket money to the Hope Project so that those poor children in rural areas can return to school.______, it is the inner beauty rather than our appearance that makes us respectable. Thank you for listening! A. The reasons why they do so are as follows B. Firstly C. Last but not least D. What’s more

E. As far as I am concerned F. Secondly Step 6 Writing tips: 1：确定文章框架，包括：时态、语态、格式、展开方式、开头结尾等。

2：确定内容要点，包括：主要人物、时间地点、重要细节、合理发挥等。

3：正式开始写作，整理思路成篇，行文连贯。

4：检查全文，主要检查语法以及粗心犯下的错误。 Step 7 Writing sample: 假如你是李华，你班同学最近开长了一场讨论，主题是：高三学生要不要参加体育锻炼，请根据下面所提供的信息，写一篇短文，介绍讨论的情况，并发表自己的观点．

比例

观点

主要理由

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支持

１．应该天天进行体育锻炼２．做早操，打乒乓球，打篮球，但时间不要过３．锻炼能增强质减少疾病４．锻炼能使大脑休息，使学习效果更好．

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反对

１锻炼浪费时间２．锻炼使人疲劳３．锻炼以后很兴奋，较长时间不能学习４．锻炼中可能受伤

1.关键词语（key words) 体育锻炼 take exercises

做早操 do morning exercises

增强体质 build up the body

减少疾病 reduce the disease

休息 have a rest

学习有效果

study more effectively

浪费时间 a waste of time

投入学习 pay attention to study

受伤 be hurt

2.作文结构

1) .….have had a discussion about whether students of Senior 3 should take physical exercises. As we know, every coin has two sides./Different students have different ideas . 2). 55%of the students think………….such as(举例)……..（原因）…..

3). On the other hand,45% of the students believe…….(原因）……..

4). In my opinion, I prefer to 3.范文：

Recently , we have had a discussion about whether students of Senior 3 should take physical exercises. As we know, every coin has two sides. 55%of the students think they should take all kinds of exercises every day ,such as doing morning exercises, playing table tennis and playing basketball, but not spend too much time on them . As a proverb says ,” all work and no play makes Jack a dull boy. "Exercise builds up their body and reduce lots of diseases. Sports let them have a good rest so that their study will be more effective On the other hand,45% of the students believe taking exercise is a waste of time and tiring. After taking exercise, they are too excited for a long time to pay attention to their lessons. And it’s possible to be hurt in sports.

In my opinion, I prefer to take proper exercises in my spare time. Step 8 Homework: Write an essay using the skills we learned in this lesson. 某中学生英语报社正开展一场题为“Young teachers or elderly teachers，which do you prefer?”

请你依据下面表格所提供的要点写一篇短文，向该报社投稿。

注意：1．词数100左右，开头语已为你写好，不计入总数；2．短文必须包含表格的全部内容。要求观点明确，结构合理，紧凑连贯