Writing课堂实录及点评

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My first ride on a train Period 4

English Writing 河曲中学

王丽琴

一

课标分析

1.中心任务

根据所学课文，结合自己的旅游经历写一篇游记。在上课前让学生写自己的旅游信息，包括交通方式，目的地，所见所闻。

2. 训练目标

语言技能：通过小组聊天分享自己印象深刻的一次有旅游。

语言知识：在口头交流和笔头表达时运用一些高级词汇，描述自己的感受；学会如何正确表达时间。

3.学习策略：

主动拓宽英语学习渠道，通过课外书籍和网络获得跟广泛的信息，扩展所学知；养成自主学习的习惯，培养整合知识和信息的能力。

4.情感目标：

有正确的英语学习动机，敢于用英语进行沟通和表达，形成自主学习和合作探究的学习态度和习惯。

二

教材分析（Analysis of teaching content）

这是模块二的写作教学，话题是“My first ride on a

train”，是学生比较熟悉的话题。要求学生在学习课文后仿写自己印象深刻的旅游经历。

三

学情分析

话题“My first ride on a train”对学生来说比较熟悉，学生对旅游都有预定的了解，愿意各抒己见分享自己的旅游经历；学生的求知欲望较强，对旅游充满兴趣，很渴望了解外面的世界。但是高一学生的词汇储备量未达到理想水平，会受到口头表达能力的局限，不能用地道英语描述风光，事件和回忆。

四教学目标（Teaching aims）

1.Knowledge and skills

⑴To train and improve students’ writing skills；

⑵To train students’ oral expression ability.

⑶To learn how to describe a trip experience. (学习课文后，掌握用英文写以游记体裁文章的基本技能) 2.Process and strategies

⑴To make the students know how to write a paragraph about a journey topic.

⑵To develop students’ ability to make full use of reference books in order to

improve their writing skills ⑶P-T-P (pre-task;task cycle;post-task)运用任务教学途径，围绕核心任务，开展促进自主学习课堂活动，强调合作

探究和独立思考想结合。

(目的：指导学生学会欣赏游记，并能模仿写自己的旅游经历和体会；培养学生选择使用参考书的技能，促进写作水平的提高。) 3.Emotion and values （提高学生的课余生活质量，欣赏美丽河山，热爱和保护自然，同时能分享自己的旅游经历。）

五教学重点（Teaching important points）

1.Learn to research by cooperation and write a paragraph about a journey topic. 2.Lead the students to take an active part in class. 六

教学难点（Teaching difficults points）

1.How to bridge reading and writing

2.How to describe an unforgetrable traveling experience . 七

教学过程（Teaching procedure）

Step1.

Greeting and warming up（3分钟）

T: Do you like traveling? Explain why? SS：（group discussion）

T：（Sumarize the advantages of travelling）

1. It makes you relaxed. 2. It makes you knowledgeable. 3. You can meet new people through traveling.

4. You can know more about history and culture. 5. You can explore new places,experience new customs,try new foods and learn more about the world. 6. It makes you get close to nature. 7. It can enrich your life. 8.It can broaden your horizon. 9……..

(设计目的：为本节课写作教学热身，激发学生兴趣和积极性，锻炼英语表达能力。) Step2

Lead-in（3分钟）

1. Last winter , I went to Hong Kong by plane with my family to visit my son ,who was studying in the Chinese University of Hong

Kong. 2. In the afternoon,we went to the Peak （太平山），

the No.1

tour destination in Hong Kong .When we got there ,it was 8 in the evening.The Peak offered a special view of the Victorial Harbour(维多利亚港). Standing on the top of the

Peak, I enjoyed a 360-degree view of Hong Kong. We were amazed at the beautiful view. 3.The next day ,we went to the Ocean Park，where we watched a dolphin show and saw different kinds of sea animals, which was really exciting.

4.Later we visited the Disneyland Resort，which isa colorful fairy tale kingdom. We enjoyed everything there,such as the shows ,and the foods .Finally，we were reluctant to leave the Disneyland. 5. I really enjoyed the trip to Hong Kong,which left me a lasting impression . What an unforgettable trip! (设计目的：本环节承上启下，教师呈现图片，让学生身临其境，体验旅游经历，使学习过程由易到难，逐步完成本课任务，为写作训练架起“引桥”。对大多数学生而言，英语写作并不轻松，也比较乏味，通过师生互动和欣赏图片，激发学生兴趣，引领学生欣赏祖国大好河山，又在一定程度上使学生为之振奋，激发写作欲望。) Step3 Group talking （5分钟）

T:Please talk about one of your travel experiences . 1. Where did you go? 2. When did you go? 3. How did you travel there? 4. Who did you go with? 5. What did you do there? 6. What did you see there? 7. Did you enjoy the trip? (设计目的：让学生用所学的词汇、词组、以及含ed-的句子

介绍旅游情况后回忆童年经历，为写作作铺垫。通过学生的“大脑风暴”活动，既活跃课堂气氛，拓展学生思维，又锻炼学生口头表达事实和交流信息的能力，为下一步写作做好了语言准备，同时本环节也体现了读写一体的原则，即句子的准确性为整篇文章的写作打下良好基础。) Step4 Writing (3分钟)

T:Write a passage about your trip to some place 1.My first family holiday

2.My first train/plane ride 3.The most unusual journey I’ve made 4.The best journey of my life （设计目的：由小组分享旅游经历，学生积累了写作素材，学生写作技能的培养也得到了体现。从整理思路，组织素材到遣词造句，写出文章，整个过程是连贯的，一体的。在此期间使用“任务型”教学法，通过让学生班级活动，小组活动，促进了学生之间的交流、合作能。在小组交流中，教师尽量参与到活动中，并适时加以指导，成为活动的组织者、学生的指导者和启发者；学生是课堂的主体，一切活动也围绕学生来展开。）

Step5 Presentation成果展示（Showing Time 5分钟）

Group1：

Group2：

Group3：

Group4：

Group5：

Group6：

（设计目的：展示结束后，教师作评价，对学生作文中出错的问题加以纠正，比如时态，语态错误。对优秀的加以表扬，从而培养学生的写作热情，提高评价和欣赏文章的水平。）

Step 6 Summary (How to write traval notes 5分钟) (再读香港游记，运用启发式引导学生归纳总结)

Last winter vacacation, I went to Hong Kong for the first time by plane with my family to

visit my

son ,who was studying in the Chinese University of Hong Kong.

In the afternoon, we went to the Peak，the No.1 tour destination in Hong Kong .When we got there ,it was 8 in the evening. The Peak offered a special view of the Victorial Harbour. Standing on the top of thePeak, I enjoyed a 360-degree view of Hong Kong. We were amazed at the beautiful view. The next day ,we went to the Ocean Park ,where we watched a dolphin show and saw different kinds of sea animals.It was really

exciting. Later we visited the Disneyland Resort, which is a colorful fairy tale kingdom.We enjoyed everything there, such as the shows ,the games and the foods....Finally we were reluctant

to leave the Disneyland.

I really enjoyed the trip to Hong Kong, which left me

a lasting impression . What an unforgetable trip. 1.写游记的五个W.

when where what who how (result) 2.游记应该分几段. 游记分为三部分。(一般按时间顺序来写;运用一般过去时;运用一些表达时间的词和衔接句子的词。）

P1 Introduction（引出话题, 简要介绍游览的概况）

time/place/characters/transport P2 Process （详细记述游览过程）

What you did

What you saw

How you felt P3 Results （自己的体验与感受）

（设计目的：教师最后归纳总结，让学生对游记的写法有了

更深入的了解）

Step7 Consolidation（巩固：英文写作四步曲：）5分钟

①: 审题，找出关键动词

②:

确定时态、语态、人称等

③:

列提纲

④:

成文；认真检查（词---短语----句子----段落-----文章）Step 8

Homework （2分钟）

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请以Unforgettable Travel为标题，根据以下的情景说明，使用5个规范的英语句子描述全部所给的信息内容。

[情景说明] 暑假你和你的父母去了北京旅游。这是你第一次乘飞机去旅游。在那些日子，你们参观了长城、故宫等地方。你非常喜欢吃当地居民做的小吃。你永远都不会忘记这次令人兴奋的旅行。