Writing优秀获奖教案

[技法指导] 人物介绍属于记叙文的写作范畴，写作时要围绕人物组织材料，因此选材要有代表性，要选择人物一生中的突出成就或突出人物性格特点的材料，做到主题鲜明、内容清楚、简明扼要、重点突出。另外还要注意所选材料的客观真实性，不要言过其实。

人物介绍一般包括以下几点：出生年月和出生地点、主要经历、事迹成就、影响评价。

叙述方法：一般按照时间顺序，从外形到性格，从一般经历到创造性的贡献作出介绍，最后可以是结论性的评价。

人称和时态的使用：人物介绍多用一般过去时。若是写当前的情况，则可以用一般现在时、现在完成时等时态，人称常用第三人称。

黄金表达：教你如何营造亮点

1．介绍人物的姓名、出生及外貌特征：

①He had fair hair and blue eyes. ②Abraham Lincoln, the son of a poor family, was born in Kentucky on February 12, 1 809. ③She is tall and slim with big eyes and curly hair. ④Sue was a young woman who was studying art.

⑤He is a good­looking, kind­hearted man. 2．表达人物的爱憎感情：

like very much, love, be interested in, hate, dislike, be tired of, lose interest in, happy, excited, pleased, satisfied, angry, sad, worried, disappointed 3．介绍人物的影响及人们对此人的评价：

①He became famous for his new theory.

②The people had come to love him as an inspiring leader. ③Our biology teacher has been a model teacher for many years.

④Our Chinese teacher and maths teacher are both strict with us and kind to us. ⑤Such is our English teacher, a simple person of great achievements.

⑥People spoke highly of him and all respected him. 4．介绍人物的性格和爱好：

①Being kind and helpful, she always enjoys helping others out. ②In her spare time, she spends lots of time listening to music and reading novels. ③She gets on well with almost everyone and is always welcome wherever she goes.

[写作规范] [题目要求] 请根据下面人物简介写一篇短文：

姓名

屠呦呦

国籍

中国

职业

药学家、科学家

1.1930年12月30日生于浙江宁波；

2.1951年考入北京大学，专攻/主修制药专业，于1955年毕业；

主

3.毕业后接受中医培训两年半，并一直在中国中医研究院工作；

要

4.1972年成功发现并制成一种治疗疟疾的药物——青蒿素而获得多种奖项；

经

5.2015年10月5日，她被授予诺贝尔医学奖，成为中国第一个获得诺贝尔历

奖的女性科学家；

6.我们要向她学习，投身科学研究。

参考词汇：药学家：chemist；中国中医研究院/所：China Academy of Traditional Chinese Medicine；青蒿素：Qinghaosu；疟疾：malaria

[三步作文法] 第一步：搜索词汇

1．出生于

be_born_in 2．被……录取

be_admitted_into_

[对应学生课时达标训练(八)]

Ⅰ.阅读理解

Scott Fitzgerald, born on September 24，1896, an American novelist, was once a student of St. Paul Academy, the Newman School and attended Princeton University for a short while. In 1917 he joined the army and was posted in Alabama, where he met his future wife Zelda Sayre. Then he had to make some money to impress her. His life with her was full of great happiness, as he wrote in his diary: “My own happiness in the past often got such joy that I could share it even with the person dearest to me but had to walk it away in quiet streets and take down parts of it in my diary.”

This

Side

of

Paradise, his first novel, was published in 1920. Encouraged by its success, Fitzgerald began to devote more time to his writing. Then he continued with the novel the

Beautiful

and

Damned(1922), a collection of short stories Tales

of

the

Jazz

Age(1922), and a play The

Vegetable(1923). But his greatest success was the novel The

Great

Gatsby, published in 1925, which quickly brought him praise from the literary world. Yet it failed to give him the needed financial security. Then, in 1926, he published another collection of short stories All

the

Sad

Young

Men. However, Fitzgerald's problems with his wife Zelda had an effect on his writing. During the 1920s he tried to reorder his life, but failed. By 1930, his wife had her first breakdown and went to a Swiss clinic. During this period he completed novels Tender

Is

the

Night in 1934 and The

Love

of

the

Last

Tycoon

in 1940. While his wife was in hospital in the United States, he got totally addicted to (沉迷于) alcohol. Sheila Graham, his dear friend, helped him fight his alcoholism. 语篇解读：本段对菲茨杰拉德生活、作品的描述，说明了菲茨杰拉德的作品对文学界的意义。

1．How many novels written by Fitzgerald are mentioned in the passage? A．5.

B．6. C．7.

D．8. 解析：选A

细节理解题。根据题意，由文章中关键词novel可知，文章中提及到的弗兰西斯·司各特·菲茨杰拉德的小说有：This

Side

of

Paradise, The

Beautiful

and

Damned, The

Great

Gatsby, Tender

Is

the

Night and The Love of the Last Tycoon，共计5篇，故选A。

2．Which of the following is the CORRECT order according to the passage? a．He became addicted to drinking. b．He studied at St. Paul Academy.

c．He published his first novel This Side of Paradise. d．The Great Gatsby won high praise. e．He failed to reorder his life. f．He joined the army and met Zelda. A．f－c－e－a－b－d

B．b－e－a－f－c－d C．f－d－e－c－b－a

D．b－f－c－d－e－a 解析：选D

细节理解题。根据第一段中“... was once a student of St. Paul Academy ... In 1917 he joined the army ...”可知弗兰西斯·司各特·菲茨杰拉德先在圣保罗学院学习，然后参加的军队，故选D。

3．We can infer from the passage that Fitzgerald ________．

A．had made some money when he met Zelda in Alabama B．was well educated and well off before he served in the army C．would have completed more works if his wife hadn't broken down D．helped his friend get rid of drinking while his wife was in hospital 解析：选C

推理判断题。由第四段第一句“However, Fitzgerald's problems with his wife Zelda had an effect on his writing”，故选C。

4．The passage is probably followed by a concluding paragraph about ________．

A．Zelda's personal life B．Zelda's illness and treatment C．Fitzgerald's friendship with Graham D．Fitzgerald's contributions to the literary world

解析：选D

细节理解题。根据人物传记的特点和本段对菲茨杰拉德生活、作品的描述，说明了菲茨杰拉德的作品对文学界的意义，因此最后总结的一段是关于菲茨杰拉德对文学界的贡献，故选D。

Ⅱ.任务型阅读

Sharks have lived in the world's oceans for millions of years. A shark has a very good sense of smell. It can find small amounts of substances in water, such as blood, body liquids and chemicals produced by animals. These powerful senses help sharks find their food. 1.________ Sharks grow slowly. About forty percent of all sharks lay eggs. 2.________ Some sharks carry their young inside their bodies as humans do. Some sharks are not able to reproduce until they are twenty years old. Most reproduce only every two years. And they give birth to fewer than ten young sharks. For this reason, over­fishing of sharks is of special danger to the future of the animal. 3．________ They eat injured and diseased fish. Their hunting activities mean that the numbers of other fish in ocean waters do not become too great. This protects the plants and other forms of life that exist in the oceans. People hunt sharks for sport, food, medicine and their skin. Experts say the international market for some kinds of sharks has increased because many parts of a shark are valuable. 4.________ Shark liver oil is a popular source of Vitamin. The skin of a shark can be used like leather. In Asia, people enjoy a kind of soup made from shark fins. Experts say a fisherman can earn a lot of money for even one kilogram of shark fins. Sharks are among the oldest animals on Earth. 5.________ If too many sharks in one area are killed, the group of sharks may never return to normal population levels. A．The others give birth to their young. B．Sharks are important for the world's oceans. C．This is a threat to other forms of life in the ocean. D．Collectors pay thousands of dollars for the jaws of a shark. E．Sharks are valuable to us and we can make full use of them. F．But some sharks are in danger of disappearing from Earth. G．Sharks eat fish, other sharks, and plants that live in the ocean. 语篇解读：本文介绍了鲨鱼的有关信息，如鲨鱼的饮食，繁衍以及鲨鱼所处的现状。警

告人们要注意保护鲨鱼，因为很多鲨鱼都处于灭绝的危险之中。

1．解析：选G

考查对上下文的理解和推理判断能力。根据前一句“These powerful senses help them find their food.”讲述的是鲨鱼敏锐的感觉可以帮助他们寻找到食物。接下来的这句就应该介绍鲨鱼的食物具体是什么，G选项“Sharks eat fish, other sharks, and plants that live in the ocean”符合，故选G。

2．解析：选A

考查对上下文的理解和推理能力。根据前句“About forty percent of all sharks lay eggs”说明讲述的是鲨鱼不同的繁衍方式。有的是产卵，有的是直接分娩出小鲨鱼，A选项“The others give birth to their young”符合，故选A。

3．解析：选B

考查对上下文的理解和推理能力。根据本段最后一句“This protects the plants and other forms of life that exist in the oceans.”可知鲨鱼可以保护海洋里其他的一些生物，说明本段讲述的是鲨鱼的重要性，B选项“Sharks are important for the world's oceans”符合，故选B。

4．解析：选D

考查对上下文的理解和推理判断能力。根据下句“Shark liver oil is a popular source of Vitamin. The skin of a shark can be used like leather.”可知本段内容讲的是鲨鱼的器官在市场上受到追捧，D选项“Collectors pay thousands of dollars for the jaws of a shark”符合，故选D。

5．解析：选F

考查对上下文的理解和推理判断能力。根据下句“If too many sharks in one area are killed, the group of sharks may never return to normal population levels”可知现在很多鲨鱼都处于灭绝的危险之中，如果我们再不保护鲨鱼，也许有一天它们就会消失，F选项“But some sharks are in danger of disappearing from Earth”符合，故选F。

Ⅲ.完形填空

On a cold November afternoon, my mother and I were walking home from a __1___．We were dressed __2__．I was feeling a little __3__as I was carrying our shopping, and decided to throw away something.So I started to walk towards a __4__ when I noticed a poor man walking out of the restaurant in front of us.He __5__over to another nearby dustbin and started looking through it. I suddenly felt very guilty because I was about to throw away a new drink just because it was__6__．I walked up to him and handed the __7__ and some snacks (小吃) over to him.The man looked up __8___ and took what I gave him.A huge smile __9___across his face and this __10__ me to feel indescribable satisfaction.I felt I couldn't be happier __11__ myself.But then he

said: “Wow, this is my son's lucky day！”

With that, he thanked me happily and started off on his bike, I __12__ heard him whistling a song as he rode away. I got a warm __13__ inside.I now understand __14__is meant by the saying “giving is getting”．

Although it only __15__ a little action and a few words, I gained and learned more in those two minutes than I did in the rest of the month.Everyone in the world needs __16__，

everyone can __17__ help and everyone will be helped by __18__ kindness. The image of that man's happiness caused by my small gift appears in my mind every __19__I have the chance to do something nice. This is the __20__of charity (慈善行为)．

语篇解读：这篇文章讲的是作者帮助了一个穷人的故事，通过此次经历作者深深体会到世上每个人都需要帮助，人人都可以给出帮助也可以得到帮助。

1．A.store

B．school C．hospital

D．factory 解析：选A

考查名词。由下文的shopping可知前面是去了商店。store“商店”；school“学校”；hospital“医院”；factory“工厂”。故选A。

2．A.poorly

B．coldly C．warmly

D．expensively 解析：选C

考查副词。我们穿得很暖。poorly“差”；coldly“冷”；warmly“暖”；expensively“昂贵地”。故选C。

3．A.glad

B．interested C．bored

D．tired 解析：选D

考查形容词。我感觉到有点累。glad“开心”；interested“有兴趣的”；bored“无聊的”；tired“累的”。故选D。

4．A.street

B．dustbin C．toilet

D．corner 解析：选B

考查名词。前文说要扔东西，所以走向垃圾桶。street“街道”；dustbin“垃圾桶”；toilet“厕所”；corner“角落”。故选B。

5．A.walked

B．looked

C．thought

D．took 解析：选A

考查动词。走向另外一个垃圾桶。walk“走”；look“看”；think“思考”；take“拿”。故选A。

6．A.cheap

B．heavy C．tasteless

D．full 解析：选B

考查形容词。我想扔掉一罐饮料，因为它太重了。cheap“便宜”；

heavy“重”；tasteless“不好喝”；full“满”。故选B。

7．A.money

B．toys C．drink

D．clothes 解析：选C

考查名词。我走上前递给他那瓶饮料和一些面包。money“钱”；toy“玩具”；drink“饮料”；clothes“衣服”。故选C。

8．A.in silence

B．in surprise C．in interest

D．in a hurry 解析：选B

考查介词短语。这个人惊奇的看着我，拿着我给他的东西。in silence“沉默的”；in surprise“惊讶的”；in interest“有兴趣的”

；in a hurry“急匆匆的”。故选B。

9．A.spread

B．came C．went

D．ran 解析：选A

考查动词。一个巨大的微笑在他脸上洋溢着。spread“洋溢”；come“来”；go“走”；run“跑”。故选A。

10．A.forced

B．helped C．made

D．caused 解析：选D

考查动词。这使得我感受到了从未有过的满足感。force“逼迫”；help“帮助”；make“使(后面的动词不用加to)”；cause“使得”。故选D。

11．A.with

B．to C．at

D．for 解析：选A

考查介词。我觉得我很开心，be happy with sb.，固定搭配。故选A。

12．A.still

B．never C．even

D．ever 解析：选C

考查介词。我甚至听到他骑车走时唱着歌。still“仍然”；never“从不”；even“甚至”；ever“曾经”。故选C。

13．A.opinion

B．mind C．idea

D．feeling 解析：选D

考查名词。我感到内心有一种温暖的感觉。opinion“观点”；mind“想法”；idea“想法”；feeling“感觉”。故选D。

14．A.which

B．what C．that

D．it 解析：选B

考查代词。这里填的词充当宾语从句的主语，故用what。故选B。

15．A.cost

B．took C．spent

D．asked 解析：选B

考查动词。尽管这个只需要采取很少的行动。cost“花费”；take“采取”；spend“花费”；ask“要求”。故选B。

16．A.love

B．money C．help

D．drink 解析：选C

考查名词。世界上的每个人都需要帮助。love“爱”；money“钱”；help“帮助”；drink“饮料”。故选C。

17．A.give

B．send C．offer

D．have 解析：选A

考查动词。每个人都能给予帮助。give“给予”；send“发送”；offer“提供”；have“有”。故选A。

18．A.showing

B．expressing C．lending

D．saying 解析：选A

考查动词。每一个展示友好的人都能得到帮助。show“展示”；express“表达”；lend“借”；say“说”。故选A。

19．A.moment

B．day C．minute

D．time 解析：选D

考查名词。每当……，every time ...固定搭配。故选D。

20．A.aim

B．meaning C．strength

D．power 解析：选D

考查名词。这是慈善的力量。aim“目标”；meaning“意义”；strength“力气”；power“力量”。故选D。

Ⅳ.语法填空

If you do not use your arm or your legs for some time, they become weak; when you start using them again, they 1.________ (slow) become strong again. Everybody knows that. Yet many people do not seem 2.________(know) that memory works in the same way. When someone says that he has a good memory, he really means that he keeps his memory in practice by using it. 3.________someone else says that his memory is poor, he really means that he does not give it enough chance to become strong. If a friend says that his arms and legs are weak, we know that 4.________ is his own fault (过错). But if he 5.________(tell) us that he has a poor memory, many of us think that his parents are to blame (受责备), and few of us know that it is just his own fault. Have you ever found that some people can't read or write but usually they have 6._________(good) memories than others? This is 7.________they cannot read or write and they have to remember things; they cannot write down in 8.________little notebook. They have to remember days, names, songs and stories; so their memory is the whole time being 9.________(exercise). So if you want to have a good memory, learn 10.________the people; Practice remembering. 答案：1.slowly

2.to know

3.When

4.it

5.tells

6．better

7.because

8.a

9.exercised

10.from Ⅴ.短文改错

He guides you, protects you and have looked after you ever after your birth. Father's Day is the time to show your biggest hero that how much you care about him. This year, Father's Day fell in June 15. Do you do anything for your dad? A recent survey done in the US found that this year near seven in ten people bought greeting cards for their dads, and as many 42 percent took their fathers out for a meal. Here is a chart showed the top five ways Americans planned to spend the special day with their fathers. Take a look. Remember, it's never so late to tell him what you love him. 答案：第一句：have→has；第二个after→since 第二句：去掉that 第三句：in→on 第四句：Do→Did 第五句：near→nearly; many后加as

第六句：showed→showing 第八句：so→too; what→that