Using LanguageⅡ教学实录与评析

如何写记叙性的文章

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文体指导

在记叙文写作中，叙述好一件简单的事，这是一项基本功。练好这个基本功以后，进行复杂的叙事，也就有了基础。德国大作家歌德曾经说过：“一个人只要能把一件事说得很清楚，他也就能把许多事都说得清楚了。”那么，怎样记叙好一件简单的事呢？

1.要交代清楚事情发生的地点、时间；要把事情的经过、因果写明白。

2.要把事情经过写具体，并做到重点突出。

3.记叙的条理要清晰。

确定记叙的顺序以后，还要安排好段落层次。适当地分段，以使文章眉目清楚。要做到记叙的条理分明，必须在动笔之前，仔细地想一想，文章应该先写什么，再写什么，如何过渡，如何结尾，把记叙的轮廓整理出来。否则就会头绪杂乱，条理不清。

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常用句式

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事件描写：

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1.On May Day I went to...to see/visit...

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2.It was the most exciting moment that I have experienced.

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3.While walking along...，we enjoyed....

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4.Last week，when I was on my way to...something terrible happened.

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5.In the early morning，we were already on...，waiting for....

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人物描写：

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6.He is warm-hearted/good-looking/tall and strong.

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7.He is of mild/bad temper.

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8.He is good at sports such as...

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9.We often help each other and learn from each other.

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10.We have much in common.

典题示例

最近，李越被评为你们班的“每周之星”。请你根据她的事迹(在上周六下午，不顾天气炎热，为班级选购歌咏比赛服装)，用英语为班级板报写一篇100词左右的短文。

文章应包括下列要点：

1.李越的事迹及其对同学的影响；

2.你的评论。

注意：文章的标题和开头已给出(不计入总词数)；

参考词汇：歌咏比赛singing contest；服装costume

Star Student of the Week

Li Yue has been awarded the title of “Star Student of the Week”

for what she did for our class.________________

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审题谋篇

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第一步

明确要求

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本题是叙事文体，记述李越被评为“每周之星”和之前她的事迹，并加

上自己的评论。按照“五审，两查”的原则，对试题分析如下：

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1.审人称：叙述李越事迹为第三人称、评论用第一和第三人称。

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2.审时态：叙述其事迹时用一般过去时，其余使用一般现在时

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3.讲述事迹→评论的顺序行文。

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4.审目的：由题目可以确定文章为一篇宣传报道。目的在宣扬李越热爱集体，乐于助人的高尚品质，因此全文比较正式，主题思想也较明确。

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5.审提示词：题目和文章的开头已给出。

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第二步

确定段落

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Para.1：点题，对李越被评为你们班的“每周之星”表示祝贺；

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Para.2：叙事，李越的事迹及其对同学的影响；

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Para.3：评价，你的评论。

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第三步

提炼要点

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1.walk from one store to another从一个商店步行到另一个商店

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2.spend...doing sth.花费(时间/金钱)做某事

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3.warmhearted热心肠的

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4.devote...to 奉献

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5.set a good example to树立榜样

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第四步

扩点成句

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1.李越因为为我们班做好事被评为“每周之星”。

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Li Yue has been awarded the title of “Star Student of the Week”

for what she did for our class.

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2.上周六，李越不顾天气炎热，去为我们班歌咏比赛挑选购买服装。我们其余每个人都感激她为我们班级所做的贡献。

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Last Saturday Li Yue went to choose and purchase the costumes for our singing contest in spite of the hot weather，and everyone else in our class appreciated her contributing to our class.

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范文欣赏

Star Student of the Week

Li Yue has been awarded the title of “Star Student of the Week”

for what she did for our class.Congratulations!

As we all know，last Saturday Li Yue went to choose and purchase the costumes for our singing contest in spite of the hot weather，and everyone else in our class appreciated her contributing to our class.What’s more，she had set up a craze for mutual help.

None of us wanted to go out on such a hot day，let alone on a day off，and what we wanted to do was to stay at home with air-conditioners on.However，Li Yue chose to sacrifice her weekend for the benefits of our class.What a commendable spirit she has owned！Since she has set such a good example to us，she is worthy of being awarded the title of “Star Student of the Week”.