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华南师范大学

2010年广东省骨干教师培训材料

教案设计：How to enlarge and enrich your sentence in writing

学员姓名：

张

梅

学

号：

学

科：

英

语

工作单位：

珠海市第二中学

日期：

2011

年

4

月

5 日

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Teaching Plan

珠海二中

张梅

How to enlarge and enrich your sentence in writing

Teaching content:

Tell the students how to enlarge and enrich their sentences in their English writing

Teaching Aim :

Let the students learn how to make their compositions fluent and meaningful

Teaching method: ①

Students-center teaching method ②

combination of teaching and learning Teaching Time : Two periods :one for the teacher’s teaching and the other for the student’s practicing and correcting Teaching Process :

Ⅰ. Lead-in

Show the topic written by the students last week : 某英文报纸以“一个有修养的人”为话题开展征文活动，请你写一篇短文投稿。

写作内容：

1．

一个人不能够没有修养（culture ）；

2．

有修养的表现：对待他人始终彬彬有礼，面带微笑；尊重，关心，帮助他人，扶贫助困；爱护公物，保护环境；

3．

呼吁大家做有修养的人。

写作要求：

只能使用5个句子表达全部内容

评分标准：

句子结构准确，信息内容完整，篇章结构连贯

In this composition , the difficult part is the underlined sentences because they are written in the form of Chinese phrases .You must change them into English sentences according to English expressions . Then how do we transfer these phrases into English sentences ? Now , please compare the following sentences written by th students and tell me which one is the best . S1:Culture is treat others always with manners and keep smiling ;respect and care about others . We should be helpful for others who are need your help .(26W) S2: A man of culture should treat others politely and he always smiles to others

. He should respect, care about and help others and like to help the poor . He should love the public things and protect our environment(38W) . S3: A man of culture politely treats others with smiles on his face all the time . He is not only

concerned about others ,but also shows a great respect

for others and gives a helping hand to them . What’s more ,he thinks it important to help the poor and those who are in trouble , take good care of public property and have the awareness of protecting

the environment(67W) . Yes ,the third sentence is the best .Why ? Please give me some evidence : In S3, he used several suitable phrases ,proper conjunctions ,and the use of

“it”

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“with”

and “attributive clause”

. So from this sentence ,we can see if we want to enrich our sentence ,first, we should make correct sentence and then we should try to use proper phrases instead of simple words and

use some advanced structures and sentence patterns as possible as we can . At last ,in order to make our composition fluent ,we should use some transitional words ,phrases or even some sentences . This is a very necessary thinking

for your writing especially for the basic writing .Why ? Now please look at the basic writing

of Guangdong Province in the recent 3 years

基础写作（共1小题，满分15分）(2010 广东高考) 以下是一则关于中国政府决定禁烟的报道的主要内容。

内 容：公共场所禁烟

实施时间：2011年1月1日起

实施范围：全国

目 标：所有室内公共场所无烟

措 施：张贴禁烟标志

相关数据：

（1）吸烟人数：约3.5亿

（2）分 布：男性75％;女性：25％

（3）受二手烟影响人数：约5.4亿

（4）因二手烟死亡人数：超过10万/年

二手烟：second-hand smoke [写作内容] 请根据以上内容给学校英语墙报写一篇通讯，内容包括：

1.禁烟决定的内容及实施的时间和范围; 2.目标和措施; 3.相关数据。

[写作要求] 只能用5个句子表达全部内容。

[评分标准] 句子结构准确，信息内容完整，篇章结构连贯。

（2009广东高考）

你是校报记者，

最近进行了一次采访。以下是这次采访的情况：

时间：上周末

对象：眼科医生（eye-doctor）王教授

主题：我国中小学生近视

（

Short-sighted ）问题

基本信息：(1) 发生率：略高于50%

（2）人数：世界第一

专家解读：（1）原因：很复杂

（2）治疗：没有哪一种药物能治愈近视

（3）建议：不要过度用眼；多参加户外活动

（4）特别提示：如何握笔也和近视有关

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根据以上情况写一篇采访报道，并包括如下内容：

1．

采访的时间，对象和主题

2．

中小学生近视的发生率及人数

[写作要求] 只能用5个句子表达全部内容。

评分标准：句子结构准确，信息内容完整，篇章结构连贯

（2008 广东高考）

你很荣幸地成为2008北京奥运会的一名志愿者，负责编写奥运比赛项目的英语介绍。

请根据以下中文提纲，编写射击项目的英语介绍：

背景：射击最初只是生存手段，19世纪末才发展成为一项体育运动。

1896：第一次成为奥运会项目

1904：中断

1928：中断

1932：重回奥运会

1968：第一次允许妇女参加奥运会射击比赛

现状：稳步发展，1896奥运会只有三项射击项目，现今有17项。

[写作要求] 只能用5个句子表达全部内容。

评分标准：句子结构准确，信息内容完整，篇章结构连贯

Ⅱ. While-teaching

From the above ,we can conclude that if we want to write a good composition ,we must know how to make a complete sentence , how to combine

the sentences into a good passage and

what kind of advanced sentence structure and patterns

can make our composition

fluent

and meaningful .

So, At first ,you must grasp the five kinds of sentence structure.

Five Kinds of Sentence Structure

S（主语）

+ V （系动词）+ P（表语）

S（主语）+V（谓语）+O（宾语）

S（主语）+Vt（及物动词）+IO（间接宾语）+DO（直接宾语）

S（主语）+V（谓语）+O（宾语）+OC（宾补）

There be +S(主语) If you can use these five kinds of sentence structure , you will surely make correct sentences ,but if we want to make a good composition ,maybe the following sentence patterns are useful for you . The usage of

The advanced structure of “There be ”

“it”

“with ”

and

“non-finite verbs”

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Some clauses(Noun-clause and Attributive-clause ) Inverted sentence

Some transitional words ,phrases and proverbs

Let’s look at them one by one

The advanced structure of “There be ”

There is no doubt that …. There is no need to do …. There is no point in doing …. There is no use doing …

There is no denying the fact that …. Complete the following sentences : 1.

____________ he is the very person for the general manager .(毫无疑问，他是总经理的最佳人选) 2.

There is no need for you _____________ .（你没必要跟他解释此事）

3.

_____________ without knowing when he will come back .（不知她何时回来在这里傻等一点意义都没有）

There is no denying the fact that ______________________ （是发达国家造成了全球变暖这是不容否认的事实）

The usage of “it”

“it ” is actually a very “big ”word although it looks very small in English .

①

as an object in form ②

as a subject in form

③

be used in an emphasized sentence

Now please translate the following sentences into Chinese and tell me the usage of “it”

1. We think it necessary for us to master at least a foreign language . 2. We made it a rule that the students should come to school in uniform . 3. It is amazing that the two-year-old boy should know so many English letters . 4.It was not until he saw the terrible ending

that he realized he had made serious mistakes .

“with ”

and

“non-finite verbs”

With+O(名词/代词) +OC（现在分词/过去分词/不定式/介词短语/形容词）

完成下列句子：

1.

With so many people

（帮助）meI succeeded at last. 2.

With the job ________ ( 完成), we went to China for a holiday . 3.

He looked at his mother ,

（眼里充满泪水）

4.

_________________ (有这么多工作要做)，he had no time to play . The usage of clause Noun-clause: Subject clause (主语从句) Object clause （宾语从句）

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Predictive clause （表语从句）

Positive clause （同位语从句）

Please tell me which kind of non-clause the sentence belongs to : 1.

That he could be admitted to Beijing University was what we had expected . 2.

Mother promised me that she would take good care of herself . 3.

His promise that he would build a school for us made us very grateful .

attributive-clause

Correct the following sentences

1.

The factory which his father worked is in the south of the city . 2.

The old man who we visited him yesterday is a famous scientist . 3.

We will remember the night when we spent together on the farm . 4.

Li Ming , our monitor,who is eighteen years old . Inverted sentence : Translate the following three sentences using inverted sentence . 1.

只有用这种方法，我们才能解决那个难题。

２．他开车如此粗心以至于撞到了一棵大树上。

３．以前我从没见过她。

Apart from the structures mentioned above ,if we can use some transitional words

, proverbs and idioms correctly in proper time and proper place

, we will surely make our composition beautiful and meaningful . The following words ,phrases or proverbs are often used in our composition .

表示递进：furthermore , what’s more , besides , in addition moreover ,not only … but also

表示转折：

However , nevertheless ,but ，on the contrary , instead of

表示并列：on one hand …

on the other hand ,for one thing …for another thing ,firstly… secondly… thirdly …

表达意见：As far as I’m concerned ; I hold the view that … ;in one’s opinion, I’m of the opinion that … As far as I can tell …

As the saying/proverb goes,

常言道：

表示结果：As a result/consequence; consequently; eventually Some proverbs : 1. Every coin has two sides.

事物都有两个方面。

2. It’s easier said than done. 说起来容易，做起来难。

3.A journey of a thousand miles begins with a single step.千里之行始于足下。

4.Where there is a will, there is a way. 有志者事竟成。

5.Practice makes perfect. 熟能生巧。

6.More hasty, less speed. 欲速则不达。

7.Rome was not built in a day. 伟业非一日之功。(冰冻三尺非一日之寒) 8.It’s never too old to learn. 活到老，学到老。

9.Facts speak louder than words. 事实胜于雄辩。

10.Ill news travels fast. 坏事传千里。

So if we want to write good compositions ,we must love reading and accumulate good words ,phrases and useful proverbs .Now let’s go back to the basic writing of 2010

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Guangdong English Paper and see how the Chinese material is combined into an English passage .

基础写作（共1小题，满分15分）(2010 广东高考) 以下是一则关于中国政府决定禁烟的报道的主要内容。

内 容：公共场所禁烟

实施时间：2011年1月1日起

实施范围：全国

目 标：所有室内公共场所无烟

措 施：张贴禁烟标志

相关数据：

（1）吸烟人数：约3.5亿

（2）分 布：男性75％;女性：25％

（3）受二手烟影响人数：约5.4亿

（4）因二手烟死亡人数：超过10万/年

二手烟：second-hand smoke [写作内容] 请根据以上内容给学校英语墙报写一篇通讯，内容包括：

1.禁烟决定的内容及实施的时间和范围; 2.目标和措施; 3.相关数据。

[写作要求] 只能用5个句子表达全部内容。

[评分标准] 句子结构准确，信息内容完整，篇章结构连

The possible version: My country begins to carry out the policy that prevents smoking in public bildings since 1st,2011. The main aim is to make every public room have no smoke by posting the sign of preventing smoking . There are 350 million people smoking

recently, in which the male hold 75% and the female hold 25%. Because of these smokers ,540 non-smokers are influenced .Worse still,more

than 100 thousand people die from the second-hand smoke every year .

Ⅲ. Summary

In a word , if we want to write a good composition ,at first we must enlarge

and enrich

the phrases ,

pictures or

diagrams into

correct sentences ,then we should combine these sentences using necessary transitional

words ,phrases or sometimes

proverbs to make our compositions fluent and meaningful . So next period ,I’ll ask you to write a composition and correct it in your group .

The second Period

Ⅰ.Give the students 2m’ to discuss how to organize the composition and what they should pay attention to .

Ⅱ.Then give the students 20m’ to write their composition and then 8m’ to correct in their group .

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Ⅲ.Choose the best two and ask them to come to the blackboard to write them down , meanwhile ask the others to rewrite their compositions and hand them in .

Ⅳ.Show the possible version to the students and ask them to compare their own and the possible version . 基础写作：

你的大学生活即将开始，而你将面对新的学习和生活环境。请谈谈你对大学生活的认识以及你打算如何安排它。

写作内容：

1．

你对大学生活的评价：更多机遇与挑战，更多自由：

2．

新的学习目标

3．

学会安排时间：去图书馆学习，参加各种课外活动以及娱乐节目；

4．

提高各方面能力；适应能力，交际能力

写作要求：

只能食用5个句子表达全部内容。

评分标准：

句子结构准确，信息内容完整，篇章结构连贯。

Possible version : As far as I know , life at college means more opportunities and challenges as well as more freedom . Therefore , I shall set a goal for myself and make a plan and stick to it .

With more freedom , I shall arrange the time properly to study in the library , to participate in various activities and to enjoy the entertainments in case that time would be wasted .

Furthermore , I’ll never give in to difficulties ; on the contrary , I’ll accept the challenges and improve myself in adaptability and communication skills .

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