Task(1): Writing an advertisement: Skills building 1 and 2教案1

M4U3 Task Writing a proposal ―By Amy Long from Mingde Middle School

Period 1

How to write a proposal?

Step1

Observing 因为有毒食品致死的事例经常见诸报端，现在请你以“Let’s go all out for food safety”为标题写一篇短文。

注意：①

要求层次清楚，内容连贯。

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字数120字左右。

社会道德

social conscience

Possible Version: Let’s go all out for food safety It is frequently reported that poisonous food causes deaths, so food safety has been drawing the public’s great attention.

Food problems mainly lie in two factors. On the one hand, some food producers lack social conscience. Centering on money, they produce lots of fake and junk food; On the other hand, other producers are short of common sense on food safety, polluting food by abusing the poison and additive. For the sake of health, we must take food safety seriously. Food producers are supposed to pay more attention to food quality, and they are required to care about food safety as well as profits. Moreover, the government shall operate strict food standards and punish the ill producers severely. Lastly, consumers had better go to regular markets to choose green food.

All in all, only through the combined effort of all the society can we have a safer eating environment.

Structure: Para1______________________________________________________________________ Para2______________________________________________________________________ Para3______________________________________________________________________ Para4______________________________________________________________________

Step2

Imitating – Expressing in a diversified manner 1. How to state reasons A number of factors can contribute to the change.

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由于不适当的使用，导致了机器的损坏。

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2. How to give suggestions

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As is suggested, we should consider the problem from different aspects ⑵

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学生们应当遵守学校规章制度，创造良好的学习环境。

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Step3

Formal writing 1. Read the parts of different letters and decide whether they are formal (F) or casual (C)

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I’m sure you’ll agree it would be really cool to buy some more computers

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Dear Sir / Madam (

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When the book fell off the book shelf and hit him on the head, I laughed until I cried!

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Thank you for your time. (

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I’m sure the teacher wont mind you using the computer. (

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I would like to suggest that we buy some new equipment. (

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So nice to hear from you again, Geoffrey. (

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I don’t like the young man. He is really rude and not very helpful. (

) Tips:

* Always be polite * Do not be personal

* Be serious * Do not tell jokes or try to be funny

* Use formal greetings and endings * Do not use contractions or slang

* Use titles and family names.

Use Dear Sir / Madam if you don’t know the name.

2. Read the following article and polish it into a formal style. 假设你是某中学学生会生活部部长，Lucy，你要代表学生给校长反映对学校食堂的看法，并提出建议。

Hi there,

I am the minister of students’ life in the Student Union. On behalf of all the students, I wanna write to you to give our opinions about the canteen.

Our canteen has sth. satisfactory and sth. unsatisfactory. Many kinds of food are supplied to us. The food is cheap and tastes good. We all enjoy the food. The surroundings in the canteen have also been improved. The quantity of service they give is not good enough. The seats are not enough as well. I don’t think some students can find the seats when eating.

I think you must improve the quality of the food and their service. I hope you will prove it and solve it as soon as possible. Love, Lucy Step4

Homework Polish the above article again, using the sentence patterns and the conjunction words learned today.

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Period 2

Let’s solve our own problem! Step1

Revision

1. The structure 2. The language

Step2

Discussion

1. Discuss with your classmates about the condition of our computer room and whether you have any suggestions to improve it. You may ask:

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Are you satisfied with the environment or the facilities in the computer room?

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When do you use the computer room?

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Is it convenient for you to look up information? —

What problem(s) have you got when you…? —

What do you think can be done to solve the problem(s)?

2. Collect the opinions and complete the summary below.

Discussion about the school computer room Problems

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Suggestions

Step3

Presentation

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Writing your proposal

1.

Figure out the outline (提纲) of your article. Tasks: 1) Tick out the topic sentences.

2) Write down the linking words in the table. (方框) Present situation

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Problems

Topic sentences: _____________

A. There are some problems that need to be solved.

B. The computer room plays a important role in our in our studying life C. Generally speaking, we are not happy with our computer room. D. I am sorry to say that the condition of the computer room is pretty bad. E. It is not open during lunch break, which is not convenient for us to use the computers.

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Suggestions Topic sentences: _____________

A. As far as I am concerned, several things should be done to improve our computer room B. I hope my suggestions will meet with your approval. C. Judging from what we discussed above, …

D. In order to make our computer room better, …

Conclusion

2. Write a proposal to your headmaster, Mr. Fan, explaining that you would prefer the school to improve the computer room.

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Homework

As the master of our school, it is our duty to improve and perfect our school environment. Think carefully whether there is anything else that can be improved and write a proposal to our headmaster.

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