Writing教学活动设计方案

太原市实验中学高一英语

思维导学案

课题: 批改网英语写作介绍地点

班级：

姓名：

学科：英语

课时：1

编写人：李阳

审核人：李晓芸

编号：G120190416 【学习目标】

1.

通过共同评价两篇范文，建立四个评价和修改标准：即文章结构和写作顺序（连接词的多样性）、正确表达（纠正中文式英语，也是批改网反映的最频繁错误之一）、句式多样化（使用定语从句等）以及中国传统文化输出，并达到利用批改网，在依照评价标准的情况下，完成互评和自评，修改作文。

2.

通过理解真实语境，在写作中呈现中国社区文化特色，培养文化品质。

【自学初探】Preparation

Read the letter from Bob and think about the questions: Dear Li Hua, It’s a long time since I got your last letter; I hope everything is all right.

Last winter holiday, my family spent a short period in Xiamen, which was not exactly the same as what I had thought. In my mind, Xiamen, a garden city, should be a multi-cultural coastal city with a warm climate. However, when we got there, it was quite cold. We had ordered a room online in an apartment block, only to find so many tourists a nuisance that we couldn’t sleep at night. Fortunately, the rent for our room was not high. Besides, we really had fun shopping nearby! In fact, my brother is crazy about Chinese culture and he plans to work and live in your city. Can you introduce your neighborhood so that he can choose a comfortable place to live?

Yours,

Bob 1.

What was Bob’s family satisfied with? Unsatisfied?_____________________________________________ 2.

How can we know that? _______________________________________________________ 3.

What kind of place may be comfortable to Bob’s brother?_________________________________________ 【知识构建】Presentation Writing requirements:

假定你是李华，你的澳大利亚笔友Bob来信说他哥哥打算在你所在的城市工作，并计划到你所在的小区居住。请你给他回封电子邮件，介绍你所在小区的情况。内容包括：1. 交通便利；2. 房租便宜；3. 设施齐全。

1. Let’s compare two copies of Li Hua’s reply and answer the questions(grammar mistakes have been corrected): Dear Bob,

Dear Bob,

I am glad to receive your letter. Your brother is I have heard that your brother is planning to welcome to live in China. If he comes to work in my city, come to my city for work. I welcome him deeply. So, I he should find a suitable community to live in. What's will talk to you about my community.

more, the community I live in is a good choice for him. I live in YinGu community which is located on the Here are some of my introductions to it.

west side of a foreign bookstore. There are many bus Firstly, it is so convenient to go to work around the stations nearby and taxis can be taken conveniently. community that your brother can save a lot of time.

When you walk into the community, you will see a Secondly, the rent of the community is cheap so that fountain in the center. In the afternoon, old people it can help to reduce your brother's burden.

always walk around the fountain. In a small park, so Thirdly, there are all kinds of devices in the many flowers are planted. I think the community is community. I am looking forward to your brother's round good in both facilities and environment. What is more, the corner. people living here who rental housing is mostly 40%, Yours, and the rent is about 2000 yuan monthly. You can also Li hua

choose to share the rent with others.

I am looking forward to your brother's arrival. By Li Binhe

Have a nice life!

Yours 1

By Bai Yunji 1.

Structure:

Do the two articles contain all details asked in the writing requirements? What expressions did Li Binhe use to connect different details? How about Bai Yunji? Li Binhe:__________________________________________________________________________________ Bai Yunji: _________________________________________________________________________________ Summarize: Besides “fistly, secondly…”, We can also write articles in order of __________________________. 2.

Expressions: There are so many Chinglish expressions underlined, can you rewrite them? the rent of the community is cheap

I am looking forward to your brother's round the corner. I welcome him deeply. the west side of a foreign bookstore. people living here who rental housing is mostly 40%,

3.

Grammar: Can you rewrite the sentences into one with an attributive clause(定语从句). a)

If he comes to work in my city, he should find a suitable community to live in. What's more, the community I live in is a good choice for him. Here are some of my introductions to it. _______________________________________________________________________________________________

b)

When you walk into the community, you will see a fountain in the center. In the afternoon, old people always walk around the fountain. __________________________________________________________________________________________ c)

…the rent is about 2000 yuan monthly. You can also choose to share the rent with others.

__________________________________________________________________________________________ 4.

Culture: Which copy is more connected with Chinese culture? What are the expressions? Details about Chinese culture:__________________________________________________________________.

5.

More details: Can you come up with more cultural details to attract Bob’s brother to live in your neighborhood? For example, ________________________________________________________________________________ 【自省新探】Progress

Now polish your partner’s article online and then polish your own article again. We can think about___________, _________, __________, __________ while polishing it. 【展示深探】Production

Homework: write an article about Taiyuan. Number:1354830 2