Using LanguageⅡ第二课时教学实录

写作——用词防重复

——高三专题复习：写作

Teaching aims 教学目标

Knowledge aims知识目标: Enable the students to know more about writing, including the ways to reduce the frequency of repeat using the same words in writing Skill aims能力目标

Improve the students’ writing ability. Emotional

aims情感目标: Enable the students to learn more about writing skills to improve writing.

Teaching important point教学重点: Help the Ss to master the ways to reduce the frequency of repeat using the same words in writing Teaching difficult point教学难点: How to reduce the frequency of repeat using the same words in writing Teaching aids教具准备

A computer and a projector. Teaching procedures & ways教学过程与方法:

Task-based method. Step 1 leading 英国文豪莎士比亚的名言：

Brevity is the soul of wit.“言贵简洁”。英语中的一篇好文章，除了表示强调或为了避免意义的含糊外，同—个词或短语很少连续使用，有时在一个句群或段落也要尽量避免重复使用相同的词，多余的或转弯抹角的词语都不利于明白地表达思想。

Step 2 warming up exercise because--(so)

though / although--(but)

repeat--(again)

enter--(into)

return---(back)

unite--(together)

master--(well)

improve--(better),

sink--(down)

renew --(again),

about/around-(or so)

walk--(on foot),

alone--(by oneself)

meet--(together) think over --(carefully)

(very)--perfect,

(very)—excellent

(very)—tiny

Step 3 explaining: the ways to reduce repeating 1．使用代词避免重复，这是最普通最常见的一种方法。

Can you mend this table? I broke it yesterday．

When the children entered，each was given a small present．

Then they went on with the peak.

The climb was an extremely difficult one．

2．用同义词避免重复。

shooting was developed into a sport. And then it evolved into that women were allowed to join in.

3. 用省略手段避免重复。

省略的主要功能就是避免重复，并能突出新的信息。它能节省词语，使语句结构紧凑。

He spoke for the first motion and against the second．

(against= spoke against

the second＝the second motion)(省略动词、名词)他赞成第

一个提议，反对第二个提议

Robert seemed angry，and George certainly was.

(angry)(省略形容词)

罗伯特似乎生气了,而乔治肯定是生气了。

Jack needn‘t stay here，but George must. (must＝but George must stay here) (省略动词)

杰克不必留下，可是乔治必须留下来。

Step 4 consolidation 阅读与浓缩。读下列段落及其浓缩的句子

1.

The boy struggled to ride his bike.

The boy is four

years old and he is active.

The bike is new and it is a light blue color.

浓缩为：

The active boy who is four years old struggled to ride his new light blue bike . 2.

The animal trainer dove into the pool.

The trainer was skilled and athletic.

She was excited when she dove into the

pool.

浓缩为:

The skilled and athletic animal trainer dove into the pool excitedly. 3. 下列各句均存在词义重复，请指出

1) When did you return back home from Beijing?

When did you return home from Beijing? 2) Mr. Jenkins had a sports car which Mr. Jenkins liked driving very fast.

Mr. Jenkins had a sports car which he liked driving very fast. 3) My mother wants me to visit my aunt this Sunday but I'd like

to visit her next Sunday.

My mother wants me to visit my aunt this Sunday but I'd like next Sunday. 4). Unemployment often brings people problems such as economical

problems and psychological problems.

Unemployment often brings people problems such as economical and psychological ones 5). Joan will stay up tonight and Margaret will stay up tomorrow evening.

Joan will stay up tonight and so will Margaret

tomorrow evening. Step 5 writing: explaning

1. Homework of yesterday: 第一节

基础写作

(共1小题，满分15分) [写作内容] 请根据以下中文提纲，编写射击项目的英语介绍：

背景：射击最初只是生存工具，19世纪末才发展成为

一项体育运动。

1896：第一次成为奥运项目

1904：中断

1928：中断

1932：重回奥运会

1968：第一次允许妇女参加奥运射击比赛

现状：稳步发展，1896奥运会只有三项射击项目，现今有17项。

[写作要求] 只能使用5个句子表达全部内容

2. explaining 注意：

题目已列举出全部信息点，要求考生用5个句子表达全部内容。

此题非“创造性”作文，切忌“天马行空”，“画蛇添足”，“狗尾续貂”。

它重点考查重要信息的完整性，句子结构的准确性和篇章结构的连贯性。

3. 构思：

信息分组: 将7大信息要点分成五组：

(1)射击的背景；

(2)1896年成为奥运项目；

(3)两年的中断与1932年重回奥运会；

(4)第一次妇女参加射击比赛；

(5)现状介绍。

4. 句式变化。

分组之后，每组信息通过什么样的句式结构串联就显得特别重要，因为这一环节展现的是组句能力: “最初作为生存的工具”这一名词短语作第一句主语的同位语:

Shooting, originally a tool for people to survive in the world, developed into….”

第二句以分词段语开头:

Accepted as an Olympic sport in 1896, it….

第三句为简单句可以直接写；

第四句可以用强调句对时间

“1968年”加以强调:

It was in the year 1968 that ….

最后一句，用with结构对前面内容补充说明: Now it grows to have 19 events, with just 3 ones at Olympic Games in 1896. 例如：

1968年第一次允许妇女参加奥运射击比赛

In 1968, women were allowed to joined in Olympic shooting for the first time. It was in 1968 that women were first allowed to compete in Olympic shooting. Not until 1968 were women first allowed to compete in Olympics. It was not until 1968 that women were first allowed to compete in Olympic shooting.

It was for the first time that women were allowed to compete in Olympic shooting in 1968. It was the first time that women had been allowed to compete in Olympic shooting in 1968. 5. 错误用词：

19世纪末

at the end of 19 century 一项体育运动:

a sports 第一次成为奥运项目:

became the sport project at the first time 中断

:

be cut off(切断);

be broken up(打碎, 破碎) 重回奥运会: return back to the olympic ；

return to the Olympic Game 6. fill in blanks Shooting, originally a tool for people to _______(survive), __________(develop) into a sport in the late 19th century. __________ (accept) as an Olympic sport in 1896, it was suspended in 1904 and 1928. _________, it was listed among Olympics again in1932. And it was not ______1968 that women were first allowed to compete _____Olympic shooting. Now, ______ its steady development, shooting includes 17 events, ______ there were only 3 in 1896. (survive; developed; Accepted; Fortunately; until; in; with; while) Step 6 homework-Writing task: 请使用5个句子完整表达下面所给的信息，并使其成为一篇连贯的文章。

1.我们的日常生活中充满了广告. 2.广告在一定程度上对我们产生影响。

3.有些广告商为达目的不惜说谎或采用误导我们的手段

4.如何阻止不诚实或不道德的广告成了一个重要问题

5.政府已经意识到这一点。

6.政府已经采取一些措施，包括立法，建立广告机构及投诉机构等。

7.你的看法：作为消费者对此也有责任。

教学反思

本课通过多种方法和练习让学生学会了如何在写作的时候尽量避免重复用词，和高考的基础写作相挂钩，能提高学生的写作能力。最后一部分的写作评讲选用了08年高考的基础写作，指出学生写作中常出现的错误，针对性较强，学生也很积极参与。但学生在作业部分还是出现了一些本课讲到的错误，还需要在接下来的时间做多一些巩固。