Using LanguageⅠ教学设计第二课时

composition Unit 1 compositon Ⅰ. 单元教学目标

技能目标Skill Goals ▲ Talk about writing skills ▲Practice expressing will, hope and suggestions

▲Practice expressing the stages in examining a new scientific idea

▲Learn to organize a composition ▲Learn to use the past participle as the predicative & attribute ▲Practice describing people’s characteristics and qualities

▲Develop the skills of persuasive and descriptive writing

假定你是李华，最近你发现在英语写作方面有着许多困难。就此请你写一封邮件给你的美国朋友Andy, 主要内容如下：

1.描述该情况；

2.表达想改变的愿望；

3.征求他的建议。

注意：

1.词数100左右；2.可适当增加细节，使行文连贯。3.开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数。

Step1 作文五档：从教师阅卷印象角度划分

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漂漂亮亮（21-25分）

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有模有样（16-20分）

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马马虎虎（11-15分）

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稀里糊涂（6-10分）

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一塌糊涂（0-5分）

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外在美：颜值很重要

身高也很重要

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结构美：有合理的段落，条理清晰

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衔接美：使用恰当的连接词

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句式美：运用得当的高级句子

Step3 作文开头

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建议信： I' m writing to give you some suggestions /advice on sth. 2. 咨询信： I' m writing to ask you about sth. 3. 邀请信： I' m writing to invite sb. to sth. / invite sb. to do sth. 4. 求助信： I' m writing to ask you to do me a favour to do sth./ lend me a helping hand to do sth. 5. 求职信： I' m writing to apply for sth. 6. 投诉信： I' m writing to complain about sth./ make a complaint about sth.

7. 道歉信： I' m writing to apologize to sb. for sth. / make an apology to sb. for sth. 8. 感谢信： I' m writing to show / convey my sincere gratitude to sb. for sth. 9.祝福信： I' m writing to send my best wishes to you for sth. 10. 祝贺信： I' m writing to congratulate sb. on sth. 结尾为三大类

1.提出希望和期盼（希望采纳意见、

给予帮助、

收到回复等）I would appreciate it if you could take my advice / application into consideration / account./ I sincerely hope that my suggestions will be of some help to you. 2. 表示感谢I am more than grateful if you can offer me further information./ Again, I would like to show my sincere gratitude to you. 3.表示祝福

（使用

wish sb. +adj. / n.的句型）Wish you happiness and greater success in years to come./ Wish you happy, healthy and successful in your career. Step4 1. 审题

2. 列提纲/要点

3.连词成句

4.连句成篇

5. 润色修正

6. 定稿

假定你是李华，最近你发现在英语写作方面有着许多困难。就此请你写一封邮件给你的美国朋友Andy, 主要内容如下：

1.描述该情况；

2.表达想改变的愿望；

3.征求他的建议。

注意：

1.词数100左右；2.可适当增加细节，使行文连贯。3.开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数。

Step5 •

体裁：

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人称：

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时态：

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要求：

Para.1开头

描述情况

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结构：

Para.2正文问题和改变的愿望

Para.3结尾

征求建议

Recently, I have been making little progress in English writing. I am writing to ask you for some suggestions about how to improve it.

Here are my problems. Firstly, I found that it’s difficult to use the right grammar in my composition. Secondly, using proper words and phrases to express my view is another

problem. Finally, what trouble me most is that

I can’t finish the composition in the limited

time. I can’t wait to make changes.

As an American, you must be good at writing in English, so I hope you can give me some advice. I will appreciate if you can help me get rid of the problems. Step6

Homework 假定你是Andy，李华写信说他发现在英语写作方面有着许多困难。就此请你回一封邮件给他, 主要内容如下：

1.描述该情况；

2.写作文的建议；

3. 祝愿他可以取得进步。

注意：

1.词数100左右；2.可适当增加细节，使行文连贯。3.开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数。