Using LanguageⅡ教学设计(第二课时)

Ways to polish your writing

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Teaching Plan Ways to polish your writing Teacher:

Encky Leung梁恩奇

From Dongguan NO.1 Senior High School

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Teaching Aims 

To guide students to apply various advanced ways to polish their writing 

To make students clear about three main approaches to beautify articles 

To make students get higher marks in writing assignment and become more confident 

To guide students to get familiar with Chinese element, an extremely popular topic in Gaokao and know how to write impressive sentences to introduce it

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Teaching Important Points 

How to make students put advanced ways to polish articles into practice 

How to guide students to introduce different aspects of Chinese element through beautiful sentences

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Teaching Difficult Points 

How to guide students to conclude various ways to polish their writing 

How to get students write advanced sentences concerning Chinese element

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Analysis of the students Students in Senior Three have practiced writing for many months, but many of them find it difficult to get higher marks in writing assignment. That is mainly because they fail to use impressive sentences in their articles. It is high time that advanced ways to polish their writing should be concluded and used. In addition, the topic of Chinese element is an extremely popular topic in the College Entrance Examination. Students are not so sure about how to express it in English. They have actually done such kind of writing assignment before, but they have found much trouble in introducing certain aspects of Chinese element. Therefore, beautiful sentences concerning this topic ought to be introduced to students to guide them to write similar sentences. I would like to conclude various ways to polish articles and especially talk about the topic of

Chinese element, so that students will become less confused when they meet with such kind of writing assignment and even manage to introduce it to others in the future.

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Teaching Procedures Step 1.

Lead-in Get aware of the task of this class through a short video and have a quick look at Li Hua’s writing which is in need of polishing. 【设计思路：高三的课程不适宜过于花哨复杂。利用任务型教学方法，可以让学生在短时间内单刀直入本节课的主题。班上两位很受欢迎的男生拍摄的简短的40秒视频不仅让学生弄清楚课程任务，还可以活跃气氛，让学生兴奋起来，更有学习兴趣。】

Step 2.

Find out various ways to polish articles Students are divided into two teams to help Li Hua polish his passage. To make it easier, students are guided to conclude three main ways from the impressive sentences written by their classmates recently. 1.

Advanced words (use proper adjectives before nouns and adverbs before adjectives or verbs) 2.

Advanced phrases (use advanced connecting words to make articles fluent and logical) 3.

Advanced sentence patterns (倒装句；强调句；非谓语结构；定语从句；名词性从句) 【设计思路：学生前不久写过有关外国人参加中文演讲比赛的祝贺信，写得出彩的句子再次被展示出来。这不仅可以增强学生的自信心——其实已经有不少同学写出高级的表达，还可以让学生更快地自己总结出润色文章的方法。】

Step 3.

Polish one sentence in Li Hua’s writing by using proper advanced vocabulary One sentence is picked out from Li Hua’s writing. Students are supposed to polish it with the help of proper advanced words and phrases. Meanwhile some useful advanced vocabulary is introduced to them when the team competition continues. 【设计思路：总体的习题设置遵循学习规律，由易至难，从词语到句子到篇章，层层递进。这一环节为降低难度，更有针对性，并让学生更加专注，只选取李华作文中常见的其中一个句子。通过再次强调如何用一些高级的词语词组来引导学生润色这个句子。他们之前在课堂中学习过，只是并没有对此进行系统总结。趁此练习完成后，引出高考作文中常用的高级词汇，强化学生大胆用高级词汇的意识。】

Step 4.

Use advanced sentence patterns to polish sentences concerning Chinese element 1.

强调句

- Chinese Tea Culture & Chinese Cuisine 2.

非谓语结构

- Peking Opera

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名词性从句

- Cheongsam 4.

定语从句

- Chinese Painting 5.

倒装句

- Papermaking Technology & Chinese Chess 【设计思路：此环节难度加大到润色句子，题目难度设置由易到难。中国元素这一主题是近年来高考作文命题的热门话题，学生之前虽然写过两三次类似的作文，但很多都难以得到高分，主要问题是学生不知道如何利用高级的句式介绍各种中国元素。本练习中所有句子都以中国元素为主题，学生可以通过练习更熟悉当中提及的七种中国元素，学会如何写出漂亮句子，还可以举一反三，运用到相应的话题作文当中。】

Step 5.

Polish the second paragraph in Li Hua’s writing

Students are asked to apply what they have just learned to polish the second paragraph in Li Hua’s writing in nine minutes. After that, some of students’ excellent sentences are shown on the screen and all the students will be guided to appreciate them. 【设计思路：此前学生已润色过句子，现在难度升级，润色全文的重点段落。其中一个句子已在第一个练习中出现，稍微降低练习的难度，同时又加深学生的印象。学生练习完后，可以选取几个写得好的段落，当堂投影出来，让学生一起来欣赏学习，与自己写的作比较，发现还可以提升的地方，尽量达到更好的学习效果。】

Step 6.

Homework

Polish Li Hua’s writing. 【设计思路：作业设置的主要目的是巩固本节课总结的润色文章的方法，并让学生反复不断地练习，加深印象。此前的练习是从句子到段落，最后的作业就到篇章，难度进一步加大。同时，这可以让学生课后通过运用本节课总结的知识，写出完整的更好的文章，提供更多的自我思考和提升的空间。不少同学之前写出来的文章跟李华的类似，希望通过这些总结和训练，他们可以学到如何润色文章，在作文中获得更高的分数。】